Monday, February 21, 2011

Microfiction Monday and Thursday Think Tank

I originally posted this poem only to Mirofiction Monday, but as it is a good match to March 10th's Think Tank prompt, I'm adding a link back to that site....
http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.com/2011/03/thursday-think-tank-39-ghosts.html#more
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I came across Microfiction Monday by accident, and was drawn in immediately by this intriguing photograph of the Trans-Allegheny Lunatic Asylum in West Virginia, a facility that housed the mentally ill in the mid-1800s, and has since become an historic national landmark.
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The site's host asks us to elucidate on the photo she provides in 140 characters or less.
This immediately came to mind...
Past empty rooms that
echo still with distant lives,
I tread with care…
mindful that the sly ghosts
of yesteryear reach out
to touch my heart and
draw me to their breasts.
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(140 Characters)
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For more of Microfiction Monday, do visit the link below...there is much good reading to be found there!
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24 comments:

Breezy said...

oh my goodness... that is powerful and haunting.
Well done!

Keetha Broyles said...

"One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest" - esque.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

ooooh, spookily perfect!

Anyes said...

Be very careful...Good luck

Kay L. Davies said...

Lynette, you are too wonderful. I haven't yet come up with anything for this week's photo prompt.
-- K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Susan Fobes said...

I really enjoyed your poetry Lynette-as well as your Jane Austen tribute on the side menu!

Susan said...

Hey, since you're a newbie, here's a link you might find helpful:
http://www.design215.com/toolbox/character_count.php
It's an online character counter that Susan posted earlier on her site-I usually paste my stuff in from Word and rework it until I get my 140 or under. Can't wait until your next post!

adrielleroyale said...

cool photo, haunting words...but creepy... :)

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

Hi Lynette - Beautifully written, and perfect for the picture. Great imagery and mood.

Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting. I backtracked to you and like what I see---your furry kids drew me in. LOL We have three cats and two dogs who share our lives, so I'm always drawn to other animal lovers. I'm following you!

jabblog said...

I can believe that one would tread with care past those empty rooms. Beautifully expressed - well done:-)

Ruthi said...

good take on your first MF... very poetic. i love it.

RUTHI

sylviamorice said...

This is very good...loved the images your post brought to mind. Have a great week ahead. Cheers~

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Haunting, but not at all scary. Very nice, Lynette!

Jingle said...

creepy.
well penned.

Kim Nelson said...

This is absolutely beautiful. When constrained by word number, every one must count. You achieved that with finesse.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Very eerie and could not be more perfect for the prompt!!!!! Can just see their ghostly fingers reaching out......

Rinkly Rimes said...

I can feel those sly ghosts reaching out! But I don't want the caress, thankyou!

madhumakhi said...

Very powerful poem. Empty rooms previously inhabited are spooky. The owners always leave an imprint of themselves behind.

Old Ollie said...

Scary - used to work in a place like this...

flaubert said...

Lynette, that is scary.

Pamela

claudetteellinger said...

Lynette, really liked your piece. I have always been aware that people leave trace elements of their energy in the air, and on their possessions. Not exactly creepy, but a sort of yearning sadness. You captured it well.

Elizabeth

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Hello Lynette,
How perfect are your words, to match the image of ghosts.
The saddest of thoughts,for those who in life were institutionalized and perhaps never really escape, even in death.
Very haunting....

Best Regards, Eileen

Fireblossom said...

Resist! ;-)

Ella said...

Lynette,
Great job! Sad, haunting and scary!