I originally posted this poem only to Mirofiction Monday, but as it is a good match to March 10th's Think Tank prompt, I'm adding a link back to that site....
http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.com/2011/03/thursday-think-tank-39-ghosts.html#more
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I came across Microfiction Monday by accident, and was drawn in immediately by this intriguing photograph of the Trans-Allegheny Lunatic Asylum in West Virginia, a facility that housed the mentally ill in the mid-1800s, and has since become an historic national landmark.
http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.com/2011/03/thursday-think-tank-39-ghosts.html#more
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I came across Microfiction Monday by accident, and was drawn in immediately by this intriguing photograph of the Trans-Allegheny Lunatic Asylum in West Virginia, a facility that housed the mentally ill in the mid-1800s, and has since become an historic national landmark.
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The site's host asks us to elucidate on the photo she provides in 140 characters or less.
This immediately came to mind...
Past empty rooms that
echo still with distant lives,
I tread with care…
mindful that the sly ghosts
of yesteryear reach out
to touch my heart and
echo still with distant lives,
I tread with care…
mindful that the sly ghosts
of yesteryear reach out
to touch my heart and
draw me to their breasts.
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(140 Characters)
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For more of Microfiction Monday, do visit the link below...there is much good reading to be found there!
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oh my goodness... that is powerful and haunting.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
"One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest" - esque.
ReplyDeleteooooh, spookily perfect!
ReplyDeleteBe very careful...Good luck
ReplyDeleteLynette, you are too wonderful. I haven't yet come up with anything for this week's photo prompt.
ReplyDelete-- K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
I really enjoyed your poetry Lynette-as well as your Jane Austen tribute on the side menu!
ReplyDeleteHey, since you're a newbie, here's a link you might find helpful:
ReplyDeletehttp://www.design215.com/toolbox/character_count.php
It's an online character counter that Susan posted earlier on her site-I usually paste my stuff in from Word and rework it until I get my 140 or under. Can't wait until your next post!
cool photo, haunting words...but creepy... :)
ReplyDeleteHi Lynette - Beautifully written, and perfect for the picture. Great imagery and mood.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting my blog and commenting. I backtracked to you and like what I see---your furry kids drew me in. LOL We have three cats and two dogs who share our lives, so I'm always drawn to other animal lovers. I'm following you!
I can believe that one would tread with care past those empty rooms. Beautifully expressed - well done:-)
ReplyDeletegood take on your first MF... very poetic. i love it.
ReplyDeleteRUTHI
This is very good...loved the images your post brought to mind. Have a great week ahead. Cheers~
ReplyDeleteHaunting, but not at all scary. Very nice, Lynette!
ReplyDeletecreepy.
ReplyDeletewell penned.
This is absolutely beautiful. When constrained by word number, every one must count. You achieved that with finesse.
ReplyDeleteVery eerie and could not be more perfect for the prompt!!!!! Can just see their ghostly fingers reaching out......
ReplyDeleteI can feel those sly ghosts reaching out! But I don't want the caress, thankyou!
ReplyDeleteVery powerful poem. Empty rooms previously inhabited are spooky. The owners always leave an imprint of themselves behind.
ReplyDeleteScary - used to work in a place like this...
ReplyDeleteLynette, that is scary.
ReplyDeletePamela
Lynette, really liked your piece. I have always been aware that people leave trace elements of their energy in the air, and on their possessions. Not exactly creepy, but a sort of yearning sadness. You captured it well.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Hello Lynette,
ReplyDeleteHow perfect are your words, to match the image of ghosts.
The saddest of thoughts,for those who in life were institutionalized and perhaps never really escape, even in death.
Very haunting....
Best Regards, Eileen
Resist! ;-)
ReplyDeleteLynette,
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Sad, haunting and scary!